Yesterday, Julia and I went for a walk in winding and weeping forest that had a lake and a waterfull.When a Tiger came and tried to eat me and Julia...But a knight called Nikoli saved us!!!
He took us to his castle and we became pricness.The end
Hello Catie, What an action packed story you have written for the 5 Sentence Challenge this time. I like the descriptive words you have used to show what the forest was like - and I love the elipses you used to show the unfolding drama in your story! I hope you have a lot of fun as a Princess in the castle :-)
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Hello Catie,
ReplyDeleteWhat an action packed story you have written for the 5 Sentence Challenge this time. I like the descriptive words you have used to show what the forest was like - and I love the elipses you used to show the unfolding drama in your story!
I hope you have a lot of fun as a Princess in the castle :-)
Thank you,
MrsP Team 5SC