Thursday, August 18, 2016

Story

I have been doing a story and it is called love is better than anger and it can change your life. Enjoy

2 comments:

  1. What a great story, full of positivity. You may want to work on the syntax (how it reads smoothly) and use some more punctuation like speech marks, but we love the ideas.

    Keep working on it.

    Mum and Dad

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    1. Thanks mum and dad for the feed back

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